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Sadness freestyle
They say you can be addicted to sadness
I guess maybe that’s why you’re addicted to me
With all this commotion can drive you to madness
Delving into this cold empty loneliness sea
I fell for something that felt like forever
Depended on hope to keep it all together
Happiness was a means to be felt by you
At least I could feel someone good too.
I promised to be your wife type.
Maybe I’d be permanent life type
I needed that shit to solidify
Even if it’s just a minor lie.
Thrills of the heart and lies in the eyes.
Maybe if you saw me trying you’d try me
Try to see
Make me your hayati. Your heavenly.
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Re: Sadness freestyle
Your poem is nice. I can't understand how to do twitch.tv/activate. Can anyone help to do this?
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Re: Sadness freestyle
Heartfelt and straightforward. I liked the AB rhyme scheme in the first few lines. That really helped it stand out. A more complex use of vocab would help the emotion shine through but the sincerity of it was obvious. Would've liked to have seen it go on longer and have some compound (multi-syllable) rhymes too but I reckon you've got potential and originality. Keep on posting.
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