"Virgin Mary: Surrogate"

Your toxins tiptoe the hallow
Walkway of this placenta;
Spitting stagnant HIV in the
Swollen mouths of quarantined.

Mrs. maternity leave sucks
Down her candy cigarettes;
Mmm, smells like teenage suicide.
Drink up Mary, virginity
Is only a word.

Choking on the backward
Clouds; dangling from a noose
Threaded with heart strings
And aerated syringe hymns.

Spill your sickened amniotics
Across the Vegas sidewalk;
Your naked bastard is
What sin touches itself to.

Sifting subtle flesh shutters,
Innocence kissed the air
Before black tar filled
His fragile body, with the
Bane of purity slipping from
Two porcelain eyes.

The Devil loves to dance

... and the blue eyed baby
Jesus opens his palms wide
To catch that sultry kiss
From a passing whore.

The two dance in circles
Faster! Faster! Faster!

Waltzing crop circles into
Mommy's spine, they dance
On the eighth octave of
Of a frantic mother's scream!

Her tears trample muddy skies
Before taking pace along
The Mississippi gorge,
And pouring shattered
Hearts in the key hole
Of Pandora's box.

This child is a shining star;
In the center of the 9th gate...
Run little one, we've
Got hell to raise.

i will tell you, this has a very dark feel to it, VERY dark. lol anyway, i kinda like poetry that rhymes but i can definatly appreciate this peice. this has an exellent story to it and the emotion you used wasnt bad either.

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The Devil loves to dance.

The dancing blue eyed baby
Jesus opens his palms wide
To catch that sultry kiss
From a passing whore.

The two dance in circles
Faster! Faster! Faster!

Waltzing crop circles into
Mommy's spine, they dance
On the eighth octave of
Of a frantic mother's scream!

Her tears trample muddy skies
Before taking pace along
The Mississippi gorge,
And pouring shattered
Hearts in the key hole
Of Pandora's box.

This child is a shining star;
In the center of the 9th gate...
Run little one, we've
Got hell to raise.

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those were my favorite parts, i liked the way you switched the whole theme around and made jesus like a little a devil baby lol. this is extremely enjoyable. i loved this peice immensly. fuck you for being so damn good!!!

but keep writing. :2thumb:

Lol... Apreciate it man.

I don't even know what to make of parts of this on my first read...and I'm not reading it again... but I did like it if that means anything, lol

pz

Lol, ya, I write pretty cryptically... If you read like, "I Wish you were a Polaroid" that's more emotional and simplistic rather than complex and metaphorical. Haha, I apreciate the attempt though :2thumb:

Im pretty sure I understood this.. the line with virginity is only a word, has got to be one of the nicest stanza-topic-incorpotation i ve seen in a while. I'm seeing the Omen soon, and this would be a purty nice thing to think about while i see it, lol. the vocabulary was pretty nice, as always, along with those metaphors... great write

hit up "Tomborrow" the poetic version.

yep this is definitely my favourite poem so far this week, it was dark, and that's what I love to see in poems/OMs/Life :). I know that I'm always giving you praise, but that's because you NEVER produce anything that I don't like :mad:. the imagery in this peice was fucking amazing, seriously. I could really get in to this peice unlike most others. as usual you has dope metaphors and vocabulary,this was a really enjoyable peice, and I can't wait for your next drop.

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The Devil loves to dance

... and the blue eyed baby
Jesus opens his palms wide
To catch that sultry kiss
From a passing whore.

The two dance in circles
Faster! Faster! Faster!

Waltzing crop circles into
Mommy's spine, they dance
On the eighth octave of
Of a frantic mother's scream!

Her tears trample muddy skies
Before taking pace along
The Mississippi gorge,
And pouring shattered
Hearts in the key hole
Of Pandora's box.

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^my favourite part
real dope shit dude I fucking loved this peice. Props.

Closed- Three poems open.
-Poeta.