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Fire
burnin,inferno blazin a federal buildin
this mornin,firemen glazin down the staircase bringin out the victims
screamin,square faced women walkin out with children,a babel
light paced walkin out like babies from a cradel
how safe is my environment?
who's saving the firemen?
irony of the story,flames from an insane fireman's cig
pardon me,he's forty years old
sick with a lame bladder control,suddenly,an explosion
window panes,glass,a/c and all came flyin out with no caution
in the air,it was tragic
i pulled over by the curb,like this is absurd
where's patrick?the guy that threw out his cigar...was an addict
couldnt have it,standin there yellin....yo,it wasnt my fault
the cop didnt say much but ''write down a report''
then followed a brutal brawl,the dude and the cop
i pulled him down so i could whisper in his ears hey..''cool it,bro''
back at the station,cell conversation
when do i get out?he asked and i said 'man,you gotta be patient'
in a nutshell,he got charged with an arson
cursin his way through the cell,story to tell and blaaahhh,damn there goes another explosion....what the hell!!!
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Re: Fire
Somewhat okay story. A really original topic but honestly not that interesting. I do like how you throw dialouge in htere tho
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its okay...........not bad................i like the fresh topic
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Re: Fire
topic is original, but it seems like you wrote this shit in 10 mins without putting too much thought into it, it was a decent read though keep at it.
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thanks guyz,i'm workin on it!
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i enjoyed it.
(back at the station,cell conversation
when do i get out?he asked and i said 'man,you gotta be patient')
i like that cuz its flowed smoothly... and i ve been told that a few times by the cops myself lol. i be peepin ya.