I'ma Let Dudes Know...

Alright let me get at them.....

alot of bum niggas try to be me but know that you'll never see me
cause when i drop my lines they're iller than most rhymes

I can kick ya in the mouth , leave ya red like fall did
shit papparazzi's get at me for candids

Poppin lids and poppin dumb ass kids is what i do best
keep fuckin with me and i'll leave 12 shot wounds in your upper chest

The words that come out aren't words i jus mouth
I know how to roll up blunts cause i was raised down south
Gettin loud ? i'ma drop ya faster than a roller coaster stunt
I'll make sure you die godfather style , pop ya ass in the trunk


I'm ill as a mothafucka , kinda like the swine
Ha i'm like a bomb i'm blowin up ya bitches phone like a landmine
Like a body count i'm stackin up niggas , Like my boys do i'll just pull out my nine and let loose on the trigga.


Whoever wants to beef with me go ahead , I'll do like a dragon and spit fire
Just know I ain't safe to play with i'll cut niggas up with sharp barbed wire

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alot of bum niggas try to be me but know that you'll never see me
cause when i drop my lines they're iller than most rhymes

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Simple...but ok. could have split it into 2 bars tho with a few xtra words tossed in

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I can kick ya in the mouth , leave ya red like fall did
shit papparazzi's get at me for candids

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Like it

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Poppin lids and poppin dumb ass kids is what i do best
keep fuckin with me and i'll leave 12 shot wounds in your upper chest

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ehh coulda been better

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The words that come out aren't words i jus mouth
I know how to roll up blunts cause i was raised down south
Gettin loud ? i'ma drop ya faster than a roller coaster stunt
I'll make sure you die godfather style , pop ya ass in the trunk

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First bar....not that good....2nd one i liked tho

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I'm ill as a mothafucka , kinda like the swine
Ha i'm like a bomb i'm blowin up ya bitches phone like a landmine

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aight

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Like a body count i'm stackin up niggas , Like my boys do i'll just pull out my nine and let loose on the trigga.

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such a simple rhyme...but you worked it

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Whoever wants to beef with me go ahead , I'll do like a dragon and spit fire
Just know I ain't safe to play with i'll cut niggas up with sharp barbed wire

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couldve had a better ending

overall ok. work on your vocab and having proper structure in your verses (i.e. line length)
also id like 2 see your skill with something other than a rant/hate verse....but this wasnt bad

alright , i'll definitly work on the areas that need work. And i'ma try to slow down on the hate/rant thing. anyways thanks for replying

This could have been titled SerenadeforCock

Tight rap but still I am clueless and have nothing. I don't know who you are.