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very good piece...
i've gained a new respect for you...
the bad must always precede the good...
minor grammatical errors...a few mispellings, and misuses...they should be corrected...
aside fromt hat, this was very nice...
nice pace and cadence...
commanding voice and speaker...
fairly intelligent, fairly witty
nicely constructed lines, meanings were all consistent...
proper diction, very nice syntax....
very above average...
nice poem...
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mantra stay up baby....sub thanks alot man...respected. and i used spell check :(
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that was a good drop...deep and wordplay was good
keep it up
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Continue to do your shit man, i can see a future in you in the underground if you continue...
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some pretty deep shit, i like the whole thing man, its deep and meaningfull keep up the work man,pz.
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great job man...really deep shit.
i like how ya started "I lust for the depression, the aggression art holds
The obsession to make an impression as a possession unfolds"...the start is the most important...good words and ideas, a poetic achievment for real.keep the shit up bro!
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word to you all...thanks for the words.
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God Damn...
Nice nice nice, very deep on this piece with the emotions
Imagery was instilled nicely. I loved this line.
Ive screwed rings of companions up,
Friends have been lost forever
I’m hoping that like my art, I rip them
Then they come back together,
^Great line there man
the piece as a whole was very deep
and very nicely paced not too complex
and had a nice flow rhyme scheme was
good. Overall I'd say this is the best piece
I've seen you post on RB, and I think
your getting to be a really great Topical
head over here at RB.
-SyaNidal
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Shit was dope. I loved the imagery here, i could picture the thoughts being thought in real life.
The flow was good and was easy to read, made it alot better.
Dope vocab, not too complex and not too shitty, made it a much better read.
Emotion was also dope, made me actually think.
Nice dope peice
:thumbup:
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Really deep and thoughtful...
Nice rhythm throughout and structure was good (despite it bein centered). It was brilliantly creative and put pictures in my head. Story was told really well and you stayed on topic all the way through. Kept my interest
Good work. Hit me up for a collab
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this piece was mad tight yo....wordplay was tight.....and i also liked the wheather/rain line
this was deep
good drop
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nice man...no time to break it all down..but it was a well written piece
real nice
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The moulds of a true artist, I let my mind go wondering
Sometimes opens my eyes to success, or I go blind from blundering
Thundering pains in my head, from powders ive snorted
I don’t do it for the image, but to get that image distorted
Unsupported and unstable, living in my studio of mood swings
A bottle, some chalk and paint what ever my mood brings
That was the best part, and it was pretty hot to me. All around there were no weak spots in the piece. It was very strong all around. I took it as you wre speaking to somebody, maybe to the public, and trying to get your point across. It was really good in Tone and imagery. The deepness of the piece was amazing. Really Good Job.