LLL Week 17: CHAMP MATCH-> Letterman(C) vs Kill Spree LETTER WINS

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@Letterman @Kill Spree

Check

Ok.

Quote:

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Originally Posted by Letterman

Ok.

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12-14?

Cool.

@Letterman @Kill Spree due tomorrow fellas

@Letterman kill request an ext until tomorrow midnight

He told me about it, we good.

@Letterman

sent 16 to miracle

These bullets‘ll leave em in a pool of blood, we won’t see him survive
I only need a couple shots, because Tua have you in covered in that crimson tide
Bitches don’t even visit ur crib, so you know they never slept w/ this goof
Last time a chick moved in for the kill, he put a restraining order out for domestic abuse
You‘ll only be champ if I allow it. & After this, that fact will remain
I’m not really trying to Haarp on that, but I control weather or not you will actually reign
He’ll need a psychiatrist after this. The tears will flow promptly
But when I make him cryotherapy sessions wont be enough to heal from this cold body
U not equipped for this war. I stopped caring 2 lines ago & he’ll still lose
But even if Iran out of concepts, a verse w/ one missile be more than enough to kill you
The way u write is terrible. That 16 shoulda gone in ur trash pile
You could’ve done a simpleton, the voters wont even read halfwit that dumb ass style
I played some of Kill’s music at a party. After that I got threatened, dog
& The way they hid the record so fast, it would even make Dia have second thoughts
He was eager to fight. Ran up quick & tried to start spazzing
It’s a shame, he did all that Ravin’ & Rushin just to get knocked out - Lamar Jackson

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KILL SPREES VERSE


Letterman aka Mac avelli



Vs fresh where he recycled the first time
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...t=Letterman+Vs


Me beating him
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...ight=Letterman

Quote:

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Originally Posted by Letterman Vs Smog in 1-2

You’ll never reach vet status cuz you rush. You’re not taking time.
& You’re unoriginal…we’d never expect a prototype those played ass lines

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Quote:

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Originally Posted by Letterman Vs Fresh

You’ll never reach vet status cuz you rush. You’re not taking time.
& You’re unoriginal…we’d never expect a prototype those played ass lines

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Fuck this Recycling redneck nerd faggot.....
U champed a league w/wacks & Flops & quotes^^ are a laughin stock
& proof w/Fresh Smog around you? we see through the fog the trash you drop!
How you gon recycle 3 times & try to Pro your stats
Obviously you went in thinkin "they'll never notice, even I know Im wack!"
I slaughter more vets than you throwin hooks undiscreet
So Wen seeing the Halal I think is how I've left U Butchered on the street!
Your wife get this nut! I giver belt slaps
when ppl find out I hit Macadamia proach me.. & get his Shell cracked!
I stay surrounded by bands! Money'll make you squeal nerd
Have blood RUSH out ur body so quick you’ll be laying next to Neil Peart!
You aint nice w/text & for a grip, U aint hypin a threat
Sinacog vote: but when I advice? its medal pressed right to your neck
& get cleaned up in this yard! way you'll leave is wrecked
You such a Hoe in Weeds, your work could provide Abe East a Check!
Feelin real? Your hoes eat everything squealing, deal
But them chix aint ever call you Big Mac, even wen thats their daily meal

These bullets‘ll leave em in a pool of blood, we won’t see him survive
I only need a couple shots, because Tua have you in covered in that crimson tide
Wordplay is good, concept is ok.
Bitches don’t even visit ur crib, so you know they never slept w/ this goof
Last time a chick moved in for the kill, he put a restraining order out for domestic abuse
Good shit, would've liked that second line slightly reworded somehow
You‘ll only be champ if I allow it. & After this, that fact will remain
I’m not really trying to Haarp on that, but I control weather or not you will actually reign
Cool. Wordplay is great but the punch isn't terribly hard hitting.
He’ll need a psychiatrist after this. The tears will flow promptly
But when I make him cryotherapy sessions wont be enough to heal from this cold body
Liked the creativity here
U not equipped for this war. I stopped caring 2 lines ago & he’ll still lose
But even if Iran out of concepts, a verse w/ one missile be more than enough to kill you
Decent, I feel like everyone doing an Iran concept, and I have yet to see one that made me go DAMN.
The way u write is terrible. That 16 shoulda gone in ur trash pile
You could’ve done a simpleton, the voters wont even read halfwit that dumb ass style
Above avg filler
I played some of Kill’s music at a party. After that I got threatened, dog
& The way they hid the record so fast, it would even make Dia have second thoughts
Nice
He was eager to fight. Ran up quick & tried to start spazzing
It’s a shame, he did all that Ravin’ & Rushin just to get knocked out - Lamar Jackson
Not feeling as much

Very solid verse. The flow is pretty good for the most part, stretched in others. The wordplay is creatively and correctly used, and used often. Most of the punches hit, and the ones that didn't still had great wordplay. Overall a solid champ verse I'd give an 7.5/10.


VS



U champed a league w/wacks & Flops & quotes^^ are a laughin stock
& proof w/Fresh Smog around you? we see through the fog the trash you drop!
Ok, I see what you were going for here, but your wording fucks you. The punch ain't hit.
How you gon recycle 3 times & try to Pro your stats
Obviously you went in thinkin "they'll never notice, even I know Im wack!"
I was waiting for some sort of creative flip or wordplay, but the punch was too plain to hit hard.
I slaughter more vets than you throwin hooks undiscreet
So Wen seeing the Halal I think is how I've left U Butchered on the street!
Another example of the creativity being good, the wording being bad. I'm not sure if you're going for "..seeing the hull/hall, all..." but neither makes sense to me considering your first line. Either way, good effort, poor execution.
Your wife get this nut! I giver belt slaps
when ppl find out I hit Macadamia proach me.. & get his Shell cracked!
Decent, but the wordplay is a bit of a stretch because it's pronounced "Mac uh dame ee yuh."
I stay surrounded by bands! Money'll make you squeal nerd
Have blood RUSH out ur body so quick you could lay next to Neil Peart!
Had to look up who that was, slight negative. Points for using recent events. I like the band reference in the set up, but I also would've tied in something violent/about blood to make it flow better
You aint nice w/text & for a grip, U aint hypin a threat
Sinacog vote: but when I advice? its medal pressed right to your neck
ehhh i feel like it's too much going on here, too many stretches with the wordplay. Ex., "but when i advice" would really be said "but when I advise", but you had to put it as "advice" to make the wordplay work. Shit like this ruins a bar for me because it reads poorly.
& get cleaned up in this yard! way you'll leave is wrecked
You such a Hoe in Weeds, your work could provide Abe East a Check!
Went over my head. Not sure who Abe East is. Did quick research and still couldn't find out so this bar's a no for me.
Feelin real? Your chicks eat everything squealing, deal
But them chix aint ever call you Big Mac, even wen thats their weekly meal
Above average filler. Setup could've been smoother.


I usually don't dock points because people try to be creative but fail, but when poor concepts are also poorly worded, it really diminishes the bar. Keep the creativity flowing, but definitely spend more time on wording your bars more efficiently.
And good job tying in the setups to the punches with most of your bars, make it common practice to do it with EVERY bar.

5.5/10

Letterman's wording was consistently better, flow was better, the verse was more polished. I'd say they were equal in creativity.
Vote: Letterman

Letterman’s verse was nice. Nice punch in first two bars. The domestic abuse line was okay after that line but it worked for me. I like the Haarp reference. (Feds gonna watch is now lol jk) I saw the word play. I thought the verse was well written. The only lines I didn’t like were the trash pile/dumb ass line lines. Compared to the rest of the verse it lacked fire power. Good ending. That game won me money too. Good verse. I think your skill is better than recycling a verse. My opinion.

Kill Spree- good opener I like it. You brought in facts and clowned Letterman. I can dig that.

I stay surrounded by bands! Money'll make you squeal nerd
Have blood RUSH out ur body so quick you’ll be laying next to Neil Peart!

These bars make a bars like the one below look like filler.

Your wife get this nut! I giver belt slaps
when ppl find out I hit Macadamia proach me.. & get his Shell cracked!

You missed some opportunities to put your foot down on your opponents neck. Good use of your ammo with the recycling content.

Overall my vote goes to Letterman. Nice work gents.

I've got Letterman, both creative & some concepts but Let had the wording/exec that swayed it for me.. line for line Left was more consistent.

V Let
Haarp was lotb imo