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It's Going
Just a quick rap about how society is crumbling into this world of frustration!
As i walk down the street/
All I see is cattle and meat/
It's what the people are today/
In this thing called society's way/
Everything has gone sour/
Everybody wantin' power/
People tryin' to provide/
For their family at their side/
The whole system is a glide/
Through this world i reside/
Nobody's been noticing/
What is going to be following/
It's the exodus of this universe/
In which the people will disperse/
Some feedback plz
(this is the first rap i have EVER written)
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You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.
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hey this isnt too bad for your first rap ever...it has some alright flow and rhymes. you just need to elevate and youll get there
As i walk down the street/
All I see is cattle and meat/
...i dont like the cattle and meat thing..
it was aight..
peace
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strong but easy rhymes... played subject... good thing though for first time... PROPS
pz
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this was good for your first rap ever, a bit short but good emotions in ya rhymes, keep writing and ya flow will improve.
reply 2 my last post
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=161496
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you gotta up your vocab but that was good for your first time ever
