My Last Goodbye...

My Last Goodbye…
For Johnny...

The end of my life has come, only to lead to the beginning of my demise
I’ve dealt with friends and foes, people I love, and people that I despise
I remember days with no struggles, living life as it came, without any sorrow
Trying to make it through the day, through this endless game, until tomorrow
Memories we shared will remain; we had moments I’ll never forget
Young, ruthless adolescents spending times I will never regret
We searched for love, not knowing the mysteries it held within us
Found out it was useless, truth-less lies, couldn’t rid of this sin that crept within us
Knew you for a few years before you left, kickin’ it since we was eleven
I’ll never forget you Johnny Boy, I’ll see you in heaven…

Not really an advanced piece for me, but i just got to thinkin bout stuff, so i jotted some things down...not worrying about flow anymore regularly with pieces, so judge it on its emotional content, practically about the memories i've shared with my friend before he died...

Once again no replies. Cmon people im in a writers block, so im trying to clear it up with some short pieces...

For a quick piece it was pretty good. Strong emotion....altough I have seen more from you, but if your in a writers block, I think you could make this piece very dope because it is already good, just needs more thought. I enjoyed it though. So sorry that you had to go through such a thing.....this is somethin that others can relate to and I think it could be very comforting to read if you added more to it, and revealed a deeper level of emotion. Keep it up.....nice little piece

I would appreciate some of your feedback on my newest piece, after all we are in the same crew, lol

What can I say...another nice poem....

I know u said it was quick but the point was right there....too short for me to pick out a favorite part but you did the job...

Nice post

Thanks. Ill hit ures up.

i liked thisn alot...for being as short as it was there was very string emotion, and imagery was real interestin...i think tha way you ended this was really nice and it was kinda the right way to end sum like this....

.......fav part.......

Knew you for a few years before you left, kickin’ it since we was eleven
I’ll never forget you Johnny Boy, I’ll see you in heaven…

keep droppin
return tha fava....

....bless