Close My Eyes

Close My Eyes.
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These scars are so hard the're visably demeaning,
And my heart is so sharp that my arteries are bleeding.
My eyes are so raw meaning my vision is poor,
Im needing to explore these divisions to the core.
I'm in this position of mis-leading apparitions,
This situation of hesitation,
Still waiting for the deflation of this weighted balloon,
Anticipating the weight to releive my shoulders and bloom.
I hold onto this boulder and assume I can carry it....
I've always knew I was doomed, but this wasn't how I imagined it.
I close my eyes and get lost in the darkness it creates,
My heartless chest beats as my swinging rock breaks.
Close My Eyes.
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Wow I was really feeling this. Had hella depth and the emotion rang through. This had smooth structure and you felt every word.Nicely done.

Ok, i just got up, thnak you.


Uppp

wow that wuz interesting. i really enjoyed that poem you write very well. i see how u expressed your feelings through those words. u did a hella good job!

Thanks!

Skillful use of internal feminine rhyme and nice language to convey your theme. Well done, man.

ok, thanks, feminime though?! :huh: