Icon diss, fuck ya IQ . . .

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...er-387641.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ur-387683.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ll-387743.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...te-387112.html

yo yo,

Delete your screen name and Fuck ya IQ,
I defeat your dream sceme with one Hiku,
My flow is electric, I dispurse static,
This foe is Septic, his Verses are that shit,
No 1's Confident in your abilities,
even his momma sent him sum similies,
Nice job, I aplaud your inventivness,
to blog, too bad ya words are penny less,
you pose no danger, dont cause any stress,
fuckin with faze like tryna hold a gator,
still and shave with a rusty old razor,
Note my cold and braver, bold behavior,
your quotes show your a joke and a hater,
You were un-efficent in ur attack,
your whack to act without sufficent fact,
you talk too much, I got the Wire Tap,
flappin ur gums like ya gotta tire flat,
retire cat, Pack up your bags and leave,
rags, jeans, ur a rip off like tags ona sleve,
your rap style is an aquired taste,
Your irrational, Now retire like mase,
your mom's an ugly bitch, god dont love her,
Nicky barnes wana Be snitch, Drown in the gutter!

there you go, this was a much better attempt, although still lacking in hard hitting lines, just kind of whining on some "stop picking on me!" shit. nothing special but at least the structure was an improvement.

Delete your screen name and Fuck ya IQ,
I defeat your dream sceme with one Hiku,

I liked those lines

this was a fuckin LOT better then the gay shit i read yesterday lmfao

this was actually aight dawg

keep spittin FAZE


i wish someone would drop a diss on me

I think that your doing a very nice job elevating and your structure is getting better and so it the content of your drops. You had a few spelling errors and I thought that some of the lines didnt make sense well to me at least could you explain these to me?

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No 1's Confident in your abilities,
even his momma sent him sum similies,

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sim·i·le (sĭm'ə-lē)
n. A figure of speech in which two essentially unlike things are compared, often in a phrase introduced by like or as, as in "How like the winter hath my absence been" or "So are you to my thoughts as food to life" (Shakespeare).

[Middle English, from Latin, likeness, comparison, from neuter of similis, like; see similar.]

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I'm just trying to understand if you know what your writing or if your just writing. I'm here to help you man. Just curious

this wasnt great but i think it had the potential for alot you have alot of hard filler lines but i was waiting for the hard punches the structure was ill on beat and you didi try to expose weaknessess never the less you was on point we need to find your niche.

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Originally Posted by Foreshadow

I think that your doing a very nice job elevating and your structure is getting better and so it the content of your drops. You had a few spelling errors and I thought that some of the lines didnt make sense well to me at least could you explain these to me?





I'm just trying to understand if you know what your writing or if your just writing. I'm here to help you man. Just curious

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first thiings first, apreciate the feed man, propz!!
What I was tryna say, was, nobody is confident in your abilities, even his momma sent him similies. as in his mom tried to help him rap cuz he ran out of material, hence his mom sent him sum similies!

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Originally Posted by LACK OF LOGIC

this wasnt great but i think it had the potential for alot you have alot of hard filler lines but i was waiting for the hard punches the structure was ill on beat and you didi try to expose weaknessess never the less you was on point we need to find your niche.

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mad propz on the feed logic, you aint lackin in that department. you hit the nail on the head. by niche do you mean style??


propz to gen, dead and country, preciate it
will rtf

now i've read this twice and both times i thought it was dope for the structure, when logic says niche he means your environment what you feel most comfortable in but the similies thing it should have been just similes, but it was a good line never the less, as far as your punch lines go i didn't find them but you did have a lot of hard hitting filler lines thats for sure i enjoyed reading it and i was thinking the whole time why would icon wanna battle this dude, just remember for everything your write or spit in a battle there's an opening for your opponent to gain on for every closed door there's an open window really plays in effect of battling...
but yeah it's good stuff man good really thought well thru just find what your comfortable with doing and then stick with that.
hit up my latest post please
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ty-387943.html

haha no doubt, return the feed on my new joint- http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ne-387777.html

it's all good though, you popped shit so I had to address it, if you want to come back it's all love, I got another verse ready for you...

lol np gen, its all good
ill drop sumthin now the once

it was okay. i would like to see more complex concept n direct punches in a diss. but decent.



rtf

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...nd-388120.html

Nice piece good rhymes

word
apreciate the upp

stop upping this half assed shit, and bring on your come back to my joint, but with no hate involved, the structure was better, but in battles just try to work on hard hitting punches as opposed to a whole verse of filler.