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Saint Satan
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Saint Satan
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Saint Satan
Evidence of a once long forgotten gospel
Seemed to me to be not even somethin possible
Open ya ears hear it clear, block em up did it got you?
Your outta luck, oh my dear, there is no demon hospital
Been gifted by the drifted like he tried to up and fix it
In his head he up liftin but his lies will only twist it
He tricks it and like a middle finger he goes and flips it
Believe what he wants, he creates and then he tips it
In the minds of the blind givin em eyes to see a side
Can’t rewind, no more time, new addition to his kind
Under wing you will learn, he will lead and you will find
By his guide you will commit the most deviant of crime
Now ya sat and ya waitin, he make the rules that you be takin
Doesn’t care about the body its ya soul that he rapin
Till ya dead, burnt in flames, took the hook he was baitin
For the future I give you text - look out for Saint Satan
Saint Satan
He saw their use of freewill and grew digusted
Saw the evil acts and the morales they fucked with
His heart knew hatred, hatred for them
Even though God's 2nd children were his brethren
He stormed to the epicentre of his God's palace
Burst through the entrance infected with malice
"Father! Why do you sustain those failures?
Half of them are murderers! The rest enslaved with lust
They spit on your name, they deny your existence
Then repent in their final breaths before they kiss death!
Why do you suffer them? They should be wiped out
This is truth My Lord, i swear it by my mouth"
"Peace Lucifer, this is all foreseen in my plan
The meek shall inherit, the lion will lie by the lamb"
"You don't understand! They'll never attain perfection."
"They will if we let them..."
"Not without our protection!"
With that; Angel Lucifer left the golden gates
He couldn't bear to see what was built go to waste
He desended in guise of the force of Temptation
To prove the truth to God he tried to run away from
And so, until this day he reveals the heart's of darkness
The evil that men do and the soul's so sparkless
His mission is the hardest but this rebel won't faint
The truth becomes crystal clear: The Devil's a Saint
Coolio, let's get them votes in, i'll be leaving links before the day is out.
Cas
hmm your piece was alright, the rhyme scheme was really boring and predictable. i liked what you were doing with the topic lyrically but the storyline wasn't consistent, it seemed more like a rant than a written poem or topical, those are the same things to me. anyway you have mad potential, try sticking to a certain storyline and you'll do really well. overall not bad.
Johnny
ok I always loved to read ya poems and topicals and shit. you really have talents at writing man, you should try and find a job writing some how you good at it. anyway i loved the storyline and how creative you were with the topic, really generic approach to this topic. the whole lyrical content was deadly and the rhyme scheme was predictable too, you were very strong with ya rhyming. overall you had a stronger drop due to the emotion and storyline. nice drop
vote: Johnny
rtf on some of my poems and OM's Johnny. thanks.
Uppin this
Cas...
Decent but basic... elementary rhyme scheme and flow... decent imagery and capture of the topic... ok really...
J6F...
Excellent kid... beautifully written... on an entirely different level... flow, rhyme, imagery... really on point... i can't elaborate anymore... great piece kid...
vote J6F...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...vs-372951.html
Casito: Your verse was nice, I liked it alot. You had a nice idea and some pretty decent flow and rhymes....overall you came hard dude, and your verse has a lot of decent shit in it. I think you should improve your imagery some.
Johnny: Like always...dope. Your scheme was off the chain, your imagery was amazing, and your flow was top-notch. You understand what a topical is, and you dropped an Ill piece. Props
Great work guys
v//Johnny
Hit up my battle with .EX.
uppin #2
This is one of them battles I don't like votin on. I thought both verses were really good, u actually think they're pretty equal. But I do think J6F had a little better flow n the pieces seemed to fall into place a Lil better. Overall this is one of the better battles I've seen, but my vote goes to John
V/J6F
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ct-374669.html
hit that please johnny. my first topical in awhile.
Uppin #3, leave links.
Uppin #4, goddammit quit sleeping.
Uppin #5, jesus h christ.
i've voted on half a dozen battles, so give me a fucking vote to close this shit, Since when did front lines turn into a forum of bitches? Get off your hands and knees, stop sucking cock and actually rate and review some battles for fuck's sake.
Johnny 6-feet wins by KO
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